Wednesday, December 7, 2011

Eating Disorders Affect Our Society

Argument: Eating Disorders Affect Our Society 

Assertion/Claim (Topic Sentence) = Main Idea
  • Eating disorders show our society's problems with image and could maybe be prevented if everyone treated eachother with respect. 
Evidence -Concrete Detail:
  • Three main types of eating disorders that are causing pain in our world: Bulimia Nervosa, Anorexia Nervosa, and Binge Eating; Many different disorders are mixes of these.  But out of all of these most 'arise from a combination of long-standing behavioral, biological, emotional, psychological, interpersonal, and social factors.' 
    • Commentary 1: All of these disorders seem to be caused by things that have tragically scared them. The way we treat people can serously effect their lives. You could make a joke even about them and it could scar them.
    • Commentary 2: If people in life would treat eachother with respect, our world would change drastically!  Less people would do things to hurt themselves in because they would feel more loved.  They would find purpose!
  •  The media is sometimes associated with eating disorders because its images can 'help to create cultural definitions of beauty and attractiveness.' 
      • Commentary 1: Sometimes when people go through tramatic events, their image is what holds them together.  When they see what the media calls 'beautiful', they think that they need to be that way.
      • Commentary 2: This can lead to difficulties and they may feel they need to be skinnier or need to change themselves just so they can have that one security... But sadly they don't realize that the status of this beauty is impossible to get and they may never reach that goal.  This sometimes leads to damaging their body.

    Opposing Claims/They Say:
    • Some may just be mental and need help in the first place, why blame the media for someone's thoughts and perspectives of their 'goals' that they must 'reach'?
    • They shouldn't just think they need to change to be beautiful, because not everyone looks like a movie star. They should learn that they should become happy the way they are.
    My Rebuttal/I Say:
    • Although I agree that they should learn to be 'happy the way they are', how can they possibly do that when the media is always showing ways to be beautiful? To them it may seem like the media is rubbing it in their face.  So they may think they need to change so that they may be what the world calls beautiful, and it is really hard to change some one's perspective on the world.

    My Paragraph

    Eating disorders show our society's problems with image and could maybe be prevented if everyone treated eachother with respect. Three main types of eating disorders are causing pain in our world: Bulimia Nervosa, Anorexia Nervosa, and Binge Eating; Many different disorders are mixes of these disorders.  Out of all of these, most 'arise from a combination of long-standing behavioral, biological, emotional, psychological, interpersonal, and social factors.'  All of these disorders seem to be caused by things that have tragically scared them. The way we treat people can serously effect their lives. You could make a joke about them and it could scar them. If people in life would treat eachother with respect, our world would change drastically! Less people would do things to hurt themselves because they would feel more loved. They would find purpose! But sadly, the everyday people in our lives are not the only influence towards these disorders. The media is sometimes associated with eating disorders because its images can 'help to create cultural definitions of beauty and attractiveness.'  Sometimes when people go through tramatic events, their image is what holds them together. When they see what the media calls 'beautiful', they think that they need to be that way. This can lead to difficulties and they may feel they need to be skinnier or need to change themselves just so they can have that one security... But sadly they don't realize that the status of this beauty is impossible to get and they may never reach that goal. This sometimes leads to damaging their body. Of course there have been questioning on these people's outlooks, like what if they had mental problems before they got  disorder and that these people should not feel they need to change because the movie star look is hard to achieve.  Although I agree that they should learn to be happy the way they are, how can they possibly do that when the media is always showing ways to be beautiful? To them it may seem like the media is rubbing it in their face. So they may think they need to change so that they may be what the world calls beautiful, and to change their perspective on the world's outlook may be extremely hard. Thus, we could most likely help prevent this disorder by changing the way we treat eachother and treasure true beauty instead of the fake movie star look.

    My Thinking:
    This paragraph is mostly inductive thinking because its more of a theory than a confirmation.

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